The Dude does stand up comedy???
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Www.Youtube.com/watch?v=u2JEnm59YDw&feature=youth.be
"We want to win. The Raider fans deserve it. The Raider players deserve it, even my organization deserves it. You have to win and you have to win with a vision for the Super Bowl. That's our passion here."--Al Davis
"Winning isn't everything, but wanting to win is."--Vince Lombardi
by Marcus Allen Krause on Jan 28, 2012 9:50 PM PST reply actions
link to video with 1st comment
Ha stupid Niner fan
"We want to win. The Raider fans deserve it. The Raider players deserve it, even my organization deserves it. You have to win and you have to win with a vision for the Super Bowl. That's our passion here."--Al Davis
"Winning isn't everything, but wanting to win is."--Vince Lombardi
by Marcus Allen Krause on Jan 28, 2012 9:51 PM PST up reply actions
Ok going to be constructive....
First off, change the name. It sounds like a bad rape porn name.
I’m assuming that this was a last minute thing and you just jumped up on the stage and started doing it. You are right, comedy is an art form and like all art forms, you have to prepare and practice. What you were basically doing was a form of karaoke. Noone plans to do karaoke, they just go to the bar, drink some beers and then they do it. Just like I wouldn’t call people singing at a karaoke bar music, I wouldn’t exactly call what you did comedy. It was just telling jokes.
Slow down. I’m going to use a pro wrestling analogy here. You was like those wrestlers who have a 5 minute match and want to put in like a thousand moves during that time. While those matches can entertaining, they don’t really draw the crowd into the match. But matches where there might be a total of 50 moves in the match, draw the crowd into the match much better.
But to show you that I’m not a negative nelly, I will give you credit. You had the courage to go up there, which is something alot of folks wouldn’t have done. Thought the football joke had potential.
He obviously was prepared to go there and do it, he said he had a cheat sheet man
Jason Violation is not a bad comedian name for a comic that likes offensive humor anyway man, you remember it and it goes with his style of comedy. Ur the only one that thought date tape. It is not constructive to yell a comedian that he didn’t just do comedy. He was on stage telling his own jokes that he created, just because u didn’t like them doesn’t mean it wasn’t comedy. U get up there and try and make people laugh and see how well u do. Its no karaoke if they are singing their own songs, so to make that comparison is not constructive criticism its being a jerk.
"We want to win. The Raider fans deserve it. The Raider players deserve it, even my organization deserves it. You have to win and you have to win with a vision for the Super Bowl. That's our passion here."--Al Davis
"Winning isn't everything, but wanting to win is."--Vince Lombardi
by Marcus Allen Krause on Jan 28, 2012 10:15 PM PST up reply actions
tape was autocorrected from rape
"We want to win. The Raider fans deserve it. The Raider players deserve it, even my organization deserves it. You have to win and you have to win with a vision for the Super Bowl. That's our passion here."--Al Davis
"Winning isn't everything, but wanting to win is."--Vince Lombardi
by Marcus Allen Krause on Jan 28, 2012 10:16 PM PST up reply actions
and yell was tell
Damn I hate typos
"We want to win. The Raider fans deserve it. The Raider players deserve it, even my organization deserves it. You have to win and you have to win with a vision for the Super Bowl. That's our passion here."--Al Davis
"Winning isn't everything, but wanting to win is."--Vince Lombardi
by Marcus Allen Krause on Jan 28, 2012 10:17 PM PST up reply actions
And acutally
I thought of rape porn, not actual rape. And I told jokes in an open mic setting before and let me tell you, I sucked. I beyond sucked. But he said it himself, comedy is an art form. It’s like when you draw a picture. Anyone can draw a picture, doesn’t make them an artist, but that doesn’t mean that the person can’t become an artist with more practice and preparation. One day he might be one of the best comedians around, but right now he’s a guy who has the courage to get up in front of a crowd of folks and tell jokes. Also I know a couple of I guess you can call them local comedians who have been doing stand up for years and they told me that the worst sound you could hear at a club, is noone laughing. Now I’m not sure if anyone else laughed because I couldn’t hear over his wife laughing at everything. Kind of remind me of that Tony Atlas stint they did in the WWE when he would just laugh at everything Abraham Washington said. And I didn’t yell at him, I just used what he said and explained why it wasn’t comedy yet.
Have you ever played football with your buddies in the park? That doesn’t make you a football player, it just makes you a guy who plays a game of football.
Not arguing
You are correct about a lot of things you are saying. It’s all trial and error. I have an hours worth of material written down. But having it written and performing it are two different monsters.
I’m at a stage where my jokes are untested. That’s why I’m posting them and throwing them out rapid fire. Im just trying to gauge if I’m even remotely funny. I understand my humor is not going to go over well with some crowds.
And for the record I’ve already written some new material about my “Gay rape porn” name. I can’t wait to try it out at the next set I do
"The Raiders are the Bad Guy Professional Wrestlers of the NFL. Everybody hates us, and loves nothing more then to watch us lose. We got the costumes, we got the facepaint, and the attitude. All we are missing is a bunch of rednecks to start chanting USA USA USA at us..." - ME
"Contrary to popular belief, Al Davis is in heaven. Satan did not want Al in his domain, since Al already owns 49% of Hell and has always been known as a "Demon's Owner" " - ME
Follow me on Twitter: @JasonViolation
by TheDudeAbides138 on Jan 29, 2012 12:05 PM PST via mobile up reply actions
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"The Raiders are the Bad Guy Professional Wrestlers of the NFL. Everybody hates us, and loves nothing more then to watch us lose. We got the costumes, we got the facepaint, and the attitude. All we are missing is a bunch of rednecks to start chanting USA USA USA at us..." - ME
"Contrary to popular belief, Al Davis is in heaven. Satan did not want Al in his domain, since Al already owns 49% of Hell and has always been known as a "Demon's Owner" " - ME
Follow me on Twitter: @JasonViolation
by TheDudeAbides138 on Jan 28, 2012 10:38 PM PST via mobile up reply actions
Hate posting with my phone
First off thanks Marcus. I appreciate it very much
And dude I’m not taking the criticism negatively but I will say this in my own defense. That’s an open mic it’s where everyone has to start. I can’t exactly start off doing shows at Carnegie Hall.
And using your own pro wrestling analogy I will say this. Do you know why the 5 minute wrestling matches have a 1000 moves? It’s because they have 5 minutes to impress someone so that way they can hopefully work into getting the drawn out matches. It’s actually a very good analogy. I tried out some story based stuff with that set but all my good laughs came with the fastballs.
I know my stuff needs a lot of work. That was the 4th time I have done it. It was also the 1st time I made it through the material without blanking on stage. I can only get better.
The only thing I was truly disappointed with was when I got shook up a bit and started cussing at a ridiculous pace. Beleive it or not I did that set a night before and didn’t cuss once.
"The Raiders are the Bad Guy Professional Wrestlers of the NFL. Everybody hates us, and loves nothing more then to watch us lose. We got the costumes, we got the facepaint, and the attitude. All we are missing is a bunch of rednecks to start chanting USA USA USA at us..." - ME
"Contrary to popular belief, Al Davis is in heaven. Satan did not want Al in his domain, since Al already owns 49% of Hell and has always been known as a "Demon's Owner" " - ME
Follow me on Twitter: @JasonViolation
by TheDudeAbides138 on Jan 28, 2012 10:48 PM PST via mobile up reply actions
Ok so many things
to reply to.
First off, I still believe Jason Violation is a bad name. Bob Sagat is one of the most offensive comedians out there, but if you go by his name, it doesn’t sound like it.
Second. I understand the whole open mic thing, all I’m saying I would have liked to see you better prepared. Yeah I know he had a cheat sheet, but the question is when did he write that cheat sheet.
Third. Yes the wrestlers have 5 minutes to impress the folks that matter, but that still doesn’t mean they should 1000 moves. Think of all the most well known wrestlers. Folks like Hulk Hogan, Ric Flair, Sting, HBK, Bret Hart, Randy Orton, John Cena, The Rock, Steve Austin, Andrea the Giant. All of those guys are or were at one time or another on the top of the wrestling world in what past 30 years. All of them at most did maybe 50 moves in a 5 minute match, but yet were still able to impress. People like RVD, Jeff Hardy and Rey Mysterio started to get their organizations main championships when they started to slow down and realize that they didn’t have to do a super fast pace match where they have to hit every move they know. Heck wrestlers like the ones I named basically try to hit their 5 moves of doom moveset. Those are the moves that they hit in every match, and pretty much once those moves are all hit, the match pretty much finishes. But watch the comics that they show on TV or on stage. Let’s say they have a 10 minute time limit, they might tell at most 5 jokes.
I did like the silver football joke. It made me actually picture you there as the guard was going through your backpack telling you that you couldn’t bring the football in and the explanation he gave. And the looks you gave him when the Roadwarrior guy and Darth Raider would come into the stadium with no issues. That joke actually made me laugh.
If you are going to do comedy as a career I wish you the best of luck. Now there are comics that were great successful as guys who did the zingers. Who knows maybe one day I’ll see on the marquee, Jason Violation, please change that damn name, and his comedy act.
that girl that laughed at everything u said was kinda annoying
But all in all, you did ok. Tell this joke next time:
You— Why did the Chicken Cross the Road?
Audience— Why?
You— To get to your house!
(The Jokes Not finished)
then you say:
Knock Knock
Audience— Whos there?
You— The Chicken!!
I know it’s terrible! LOL
we’re cheap, like to drink and are pissed off.
WHO WANTS A FREE SHARPIE?? -- Blake Griffin
She's supposed to laugh
Cause she’s my wife. She literally had no choice but to laugh.
"The Raiders are the Bad Guy Professional Wrestlers of the NFL. Everybody hates us, and loves nothing more then to watch us lose. We got the costumes, we got the facepaint, and the attitude. All we are missing is a bunch of rednecks to start chanting USA USA USA at us..." - ME
"Contrary to popular belief, Al Davis is in heaven. Satan did not want Al in his domain, since Al already owns 49% of Hell and has always been known as a "Demon's Owner" " - ME
Follow me on Twitter: @JasonViolation
by TheDudeAbides138 on Jan 28, 2012 10:53 PM PST via mobile up reply actions

we’re cheap, like to drink and are pissed off.
WHO WANTS A FREE SHARPIE?? -- Blake Griffin
by ClipperBEAST on Jan 29, 2012 2:09 AM PST up reply actions
Ehhh.. Loved the Kyle Williams joke but I didn't like the Ryan Dunn Joke
Show the deceased respect.
we’re cheap, like to drink and are pissed off.
WHO WANTS A FREE SHARPIE?? -- Blake Griffin
Can't do that
Tasteless or not that joke is clever. The fact that it offends is all the more reason to use it.
I can’t hold back if I did that then I wouldn’t be me.
How come Ryan Dunn is off limits but Heath Ledger, and John Belushi is ok?
"The Raiders are the Bad Guy Professional Wrestlers of the NFL. Everybody hates us, and loves nothing more then to watch us lose. We got the costumes, we got the facepaint, and the attitude. All we are missing is a bunch of rednecks to start chanting USA USA USA at us..." - ME
"Contrary to popular belief, Al Davis is in heaven. Satan did not want Al in his domain, since Al already owns 49% of Hell and has always been known as a "Demon's Owner" " - ME
Follow me on Twitter: @JasonViolation
by TheDudeAbides138 on Jan 29, 2012 2:45 AM PST via mobile up reply actions
didn't even notice you mentioned them
we’re cheap, like to drink and are pissed off.
WHO WANTS A FREE SHARPIE?? -- Blake Griffin
by ClipperBEAST on Jan 29, 2012 8:03 AM PST up reply actions
the ledger
joke was something about one of the Olson twins giving him drugs and him dying. And something about John Belushi doing comedy or something.
Some of it was funny some just not as funny
Standup is an art form and the hardest part is to have enough balls to get up in front of people and say whatever you want with conviction.
There are a few things that I would work on and delivery is one of them. You need to pause after a joke to let the audience catch up you already know the punchline pause for effect let it air out. I know it seems like forever but give the audience a chance. This allows the audience the delayed reaction then you can play off of that and build the wave.
Keep writing material and have some flexibility in your set. you may find the room reacts to a certain joke better than you thought so if you can group your material, some rooms like dick jokes better than others.
Another thing to work on is finding a joke to weave throughout the routine and that also becomes the joke you end your set with. I call it tying the bow. it’s like building a house the main joke or story is the foundation, the walls and the roof, all the other jokes fill in the gaps.
Sorry the Ryan Dunne joke was funny.
Keep grinding!
Al Davis the Greatest Raider of all times... You will live forever in the hearts of true Raider fans...RIP
I agree...
with you. I thought some of his material had great potential, specifically the raiders stuff and stuff about him becoming a parent
Props for getting up there and doing your thing
Not terrible, not great, and you’ve admitted it’s a place to start, and I’m sure you’ve already improved in your few times up there. I’d have to agree with a couple others to work on the delivery, but I could see you being good getting more comfortable and polished. I find comics that get a joke in early that they can keep coming back to that weaves a set through can get me laughing early and build to a crescendo.
I think being funny would be maybe the hardest thing for me to do nervous or self-conscious at all, so once again, I’m impressed that you make the efforts to break into the biz.
Best of luck in your endeavors and keep us posted. Maybe I can catch a show one day.
""The massive Raider Nation is beyond doubt the sleaziest and rudest and most sinister mob of thugs and wackos ever assembled."--Hunter S. Thompson
"In football, I root for the Oakland Raiders because they hire castoffs, outlaws, malcontents, and fuck -ups, they have lots of penalties, fights, and paybacks, and because Al Davis told the rest of the pig NFL owners to go get fucked. Someday, the Raiders will be strong again, and they will dip the ball in shit and shove it down the throats of the wholesome, white, heartland teams that pray together and don't deliver late hits." - George Carlin.

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